Hello Kaitlyn
Yes, there is a clear thesis in this paper. I really did not see much noted about the” Science of Shopping” other than in the first paragraph and last paragraph. I would try and mention some of Paco’s ideas or beliefs to make a great retail business. I love the amount of detail that you used in your essay. The detail really helped me picture the store as if I was standing right in the store with you. Yes, the essay is well organized and has a great flow from paragraph to paragraph.